Well, Tyler, here's a response you might find amusing:
The thing is flat and one dimensional. There is no air in there…because it's had the life sucked out of it by too many instruments playing basically the same thing….pads being the most guilty. It doesn't tell much of a story as is and as Dan Worley mentions…there is no depth of field to it. There is no foreground, middleground or background. It's a flat barren landscape.
The one thing that's missing that could've added some life to this piece were vocals. It doesn't matter that you have the voice of a 15 year old. You wrote it, you're 15 …you sing it. I don't want to hear someone interpreting a song written by a 15 year old. I want to hear a 15 year old sing it and I especially want to hear the guy that wrote, sing it. That where the uniqueness of the tune is gonna come from. You.
You've got the technical tools to get a reasonable comp take. Just do it and don't whine about it. You might surprise yourself. Sometimes you just have to jump into the deep end.
And that brings me to the next thing. Had you laid in a vocal track (and some backing parts) before you mixed it (or before you added a lot of the "air killers"), you would've had a better idea how to mix and structure the thing to start with. The vocal's inclusion would've given you a better idea how to make mixing decisions that "fit the track".
As for "mixing tips" this is my advice: Do not turn to plug-ins for help at this point. As a matter of fact, turn all the effects off and start listening to the raw tracks themselves and begin a rough mix with the drums, bass and vocals first. Those three things are the foreground. The primary chordal instrument (piano, I'm guessing) should be the middle ground. Everything else is background and maybe not even used at all. Nothing is all that precious when it comes to making a successful mix. And if you have to turn some reverb on, as you get started, try a short reverb (under 1.2 sec). That's another one of those "air killers" you've overused.
The little detail touches (bells and such) make no sense without the context of vocals in place….again, without vocals you'll have no true idea of what kind of trainwrecks might be occurring. You need
all the elements present before you progress into a final mix.
So basically what I'm suggesting is…get some vocals in there, preferably yours; turn all the effect crap off and start again. Effects and detail parts that make sense will begin to reveal themselves as you progress through the fundamentals.
Brutal, wasn't it?
Once upon a time, people actually paid me to sort out their messes. Here's a few:
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